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    Please Help with CL Ad?

    I am still working on my webpage, but until then will you please help with my craigslist ad? Typos? Is it too much? Should I add or change anything?



    Are you seeking an educational in-home childcare program where your child will be treated as an individual and shown respect and love, while still providing a high level of learning and fun?

    If so, look no further!

    Mrs. B's Little Learner's is an in-home childcare program with an emphasis on preschool education.

    While your child is in my care they will enjoy structured days filled with a balance of hands-on learning activities and plenty of peer interaction. We focus on:

    *Language Arts
    *Spanish
    *Math
    *Science
    *Music and Movement
    *Creative and Cognitive Art
    *Large and Fine Motor Activities

    Currently accepting full and part-time schedules; Monday -- Friday 6:30am to 6:00pm

    *CPR/First aid certified and have a fingerprint clearance card
    *College educated in early childhood education and development; 10 years of preschool teaching experience
    *Smoke/pet/pool free environment
    *Healthy meals and snacks are provided
    *Convenient (city) location near (fake street) and (fake street).

    For additional information and to schedule an interview, please send an email. I look forward to meeting you and your child(ren) soon!
  • TwinKristi
    Family Childcare Provider
    • Aug 2013
    • 2390

    #2
    Looks great to me! Maybe include some eye catching pics with bright colors and engaging activities.
    Good job!!

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    • missy
      Daycare.com Member
      • Aug 2013
      • 176

      #3
      Like it! I did notice you say "I" then "we". So I recommend pick one and stick with it:-)

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      • MotherNature
        Matilda Jane Addict
        • Feb 2013
        • 1120

        #4
        My biggest grammatical pet peeve... Learners is plural, not possessive. The apostrophe shouldn't be there. I'd also say gross motor rather than large.

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        • MsLisa
          Daycare.com Member
          • Jun 2014
          • 288

          #5
          I like it!

          Maybe prepare a shorter version for later if this one doesn't fly then alternate between the two. {as suggested by these ladies from my post}

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            #6
            Thank you!

            Thank you so much everyone! It always helps to have eyes other then your own check something out. Especially to the poster who pointed out "learner's" If I expect a parent to trust me with their child, proper grammar is a must!

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